Convergent Boundary

1/3/2012

Hello! Feel free to post comments or question about 'Convergent Boundary' section. You can blog about how should I improve this section. Also, please write something that I need to work on. Please DO NOT write inappropriate comments or questions.

Thank you

- Conan

6 Comments

Greg Heffley

1/3/2012 05:27:04 am

Dear Conan, I really like your convergent boundaries section! And your choice of pictures was awesome! And I also like that you highlighted the sub titles and the convergent boundary! Everything looks like it’s in your own words too! But you may want to add some information on the continental continental convergence section. And your information is very reliable because it has the .edu at the end. From: Greg Heffley

Ammit the Devourer

1/3/2012 09:25:16 am

Grammar…
• You should rephrase your first sentence to, “The definition of convergent boundary: a tectonic boundary where two plates are moving toward each other”
The second sentence in the second paragraph “By pressure, Oceanic Plate sinks under to the Continental Plate. It creates new volcanos,” needs to be rephrased.
Change the second paragraph to, “When an oceanic plate and continental plate thrust into each other, it's called Oceanic- Continental Convergence.”

Information…
• There is not enough information.

Punctuation…
Please remove the comma after when. It is not needed since you are not separating ideas or nouns

Capitals…
• The ‘p’ in plates shouldn’t be capitalized. It’s in the first sentence, of the first paragraph.
Oceanic, continental, boundaries, and plates don’t not need capitals, unless they are in a title or at the start of sentence.

Spelling…
• You spelt volcanoes wrong. Please fix that.
You added another “e” in deep. I’m sure you were just typing quickly. :b

Media…
You should add a video for each section. It is not required, but is encouraged, Your viewers will be entertained as well as educated at the same time

Note…
• Change the colour of all the titles from green to grey. The colours take away from the presentation.
In the third paragraph you said, “(Go to the "Mantle" section.)” You can put in a link to the mantle page by highlighting the word, then clicking on the chain button on the tool bar. A box will pop up. Click on the second choice that reads, “Page on your website” Then select which page you would like that to be linked to.

-Ammit the Devourer

cat

1/3/2012 09:27:35 am

You should rephrase your first sentence to, “The definition of convergent boundary: a tectonic boundary where two plates are moving toward each other”
But other than that your website was very good good choice of pictures

Pooh Bear

1/3/2012 12:37:30 pm

Hi Conan!
Below you will find my feedback and suggestions on your convergent boundary section:

Grammar-
You have some grammatical mistakes that you could improve on. Other than that you did great!

Spelling-
I thought you did good with spelling because you had no spelling mistakes! which is awesome! :)

Punctuation-
You had a few mistakes with punctuation. One of them is, remember when you end a sentence and put a period. You have to put a space in between. Other than that you did an awesome job!

Media-
I think you had great pictures but they were all crowded in one so if you could find a picture to represent all convergence sections that would be better. And you also didn't have a video for that section so I suggest adding one.

That's my review for your convergence boundary section:)
You did awesome!

Pooh Bear

1/3/2012 01:01:06 pm

And I forgot to tell you that you could of added a little bit more information and added detail! Sorry about that:)

sandy squirrel

1/3/2012 01:09:09 pm

Grammar- Good grammar, however, you need to pay attention to 2/3 types of Convergent boundaries. Other than that it is looking great!

Information- I think you can add just a little more, since right now it feels kind of un-finished. Good job other than that!

Spelling- Spelling is good, you have spelled everything correctly!

Punctuation- You need to put a space after a period, and maybe 1 comma. Other than that great job!

Media- I loved the pictures but you need to space them apart, they are getting crowed, when they should really be seperated so you can marvel at its beauty. Also you do not have a video, so if you decide you want one remember it has to be relevant.

Awesome all in all and I think you did a great job, but just a few errors you need to review and edit! :D

Convergent Boundary

Leave a Reply.

Author

Archives