The Structure of the Earth

12/14/2011

Hello, this time, feel free to post comments or question about 'The Structure of the Earth' section. You can blog about how should I improve this sections. Also, please write something that I need to work on and what things are good about these sections. Please DO NOT write inappropriate comments or questions.
Thank you

- Conan

4 Comments

Greg Heffley

12/14/2011 12:56:29 pm

Hi Conan, I really like your information for the section but you may want to put a video. And for the mantle video you may want to put a time frame of when the video discussed the mantle, I also like that you changed the color of some of the main words. I really like all your information about the outer core but you may want to put a video about it. There's lots of information for the inner core, it also all looks like it's in your own words too! But you also may want to add a video.

Mr. Hong

12/14/2011 01:40:41 pm

Please make better use of images/videos in all of your different sections. Also, please remove the twitter and Facebook icons (>manage blog>settings). Remember, you MUST use your own words when summarizing information.

sandy squirrel link

12/14/2011 01:42:57 pm

Hi Conan! I have seen your website and for the Earth's Crust section you need to add more information and the picture is not too neat.
On the Mantle page you have yet to change it into your own word.For the Inner Core page you have put the picture really big so now it looks cluttered since you did not put it in the same place every time.Add your own words. For your Outer Core page you need to change it into your own words and add only relevant information! :P Great website!!!!

Ammit the Devourer

12/15/2011 01:33:50 am

Remember: Don’t bold all your words, make the font size smaller, and change the title font, it takes away from your website

The Structure of the Earth:
-You need to put the two pictures from the bottom to under neith the paragraph or better yet, delete them
-Change the color of your words to black; the color takes away from your work

The Crust:
-You need to add a bit more information about the Oceanic and Continental
-Double your information on the temperature of the crust, because I’m pretty sure we can’t live on something that hot!

The Mantle:
-Change, ‘the two types of Mantle are...
-Lower Mantle
-Roughly 2300 km thick
-Made of Iron and Magnesium.
-Upper Mantle
- Heavier than the Upper Mantle
-The image should be changed
- Get rid of this, ‘When the mantle, plate (Go to "Plates of the Lithosphere") moves, the Earth moves, too!’

The Outer Core:
-Get rid of, ‘the core of the Earth is like a ball of very hot metals. It's 4000 degrees F. to 9000 degrees F.’ it’s off topic
-Change, ‘all liquid’ to ‘just liquid’
-Please make this paragraph into your own words
-Earth would be lifeless like Mars’ all you need to do is add a comma in between lifeless and Mars

The Inner Core:
-Put the picture next to your paragraph. Remember: Keep it standard
-How does it make 70% of the moon? It doesn’t make much scene
-Add more detail

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